"Survivors" Episode 2: Trouble

[The Doctor]

Doc and A27 readied themselves for the 2 figures. They unhooded and they saw their faces.
One was named Derpsalot, the Artist, Sketch. Sketch drew 2 swords and gave 1 to derpsalot. A27 grabbed his demon sword and prepared it. Doc stood there with his knife in hand.
"Time for a little fight!" Doc says running at Derpsalot. Then, a masked man throws a white rook at the ground, making a smoke bomb, and he jumps down with 2 others.
"We shall intrude this. Now leave this alley. Before we use force." The masked man said.
"Rook, stop. We dont need a fight." 1 of the men yelled in a stern voice.
"Linty! Cmon! We can take them! Mostly the little one." Rook points at Little Doc.
"HEY!" Doc retaliates with a rock, throwing it at Rook. He punches it with his fist and it breaks apart.
"Rook! Listen to Lint." The other man said. He was taller than Lint, but by a small margin. He pulls out a huge blaster, aiming it at A27 and Doc, while Linty aimed a cannon at Derpsalot and Sketch.
"Run!" Derpsalot yelled. She quickly dashes and grabs Doc by the arm, while Sketch swings at Rook. A27 delivers a kick to Rook's side, making him fall, but he grabs a knife and attempts to stab A27. Sketch delivers her sword into Rook's arm, making him fall and bleed. He wasn't responding, but he was alive. The other unnamed man punches A27 in the gut, and that makes him wheeze. Sketch throws Rook's body on the roof, making blood spatter on the roof. Rook then got up and climbed to the top.
"Doge, Rook's hurt. Fall back!" Linty yells.
"Not yet." Doge says. He delivers a punch to Sketch and she falls back a bit. Doc escapes from Derpsalot's hold and kicks Doge in the nuts.
"GOTCHA NOOB!" Doc yells as he punches Linty in the chest. Derpsalot grabs Doc and Sketch knocks A27 out with a quick punch to the head. Doc watches as his friend falls to the ground. The 3 people run away, with the remaining 2 holding Rook.
"Don't kill me or I will kill you." Doc says, filled with anger.
"We aren't planning to." Sketch mutters.
"Not YET at least." Derpsalot says to Doc.
Doc gets in a defensive stance, trying to get out of Derpsalot's hold, but Sketch quickly holds a needle and Doc freaks.
"HOLY CRAP DON'T KILL ME OR DO SOMETHING BAD I'M JUST A KID YOU CANT FREAKING KILL A KID YOU ST-" Doc stops talking with a needle driving into his back. He quickly falls numb and blacks out.
"Now what?" Sketch mutters to Derpsalot.
"Just leave them. They should survive. Well the big one. The small one, I'm not sure of." Derpsalot says.
"Night night." Rook says, watching as the bodies are laying still.
"Lets go Rook. You lost a lot of blood." Doge says.
"I agree. How did you survive?" Linty asks.
Rook thinks and then whispers, "A little secret."

[α27theDemonKnight]

What is this? I don't even? Wuuuuuuut?
MADA Abridged? *rubs eyes*

[Derpy]

It's a little hard to follow. I would make each speech line be doubled space. Where it's all jumbled together, it's hard to read each line.

Hope that helps!

[The Doctor]

It's a little hard to follow. I would make each speech line be doubled space. Where it's all jumbled together, it's hard to read each line.

Hope that helps!

Thanks for the advice Derpy! =D

[Derpy]

Anything to help a friend!

[The Doctor]

Anything to help a friend!

=D thank you!

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